I agree with this--really good for a "classic"-style EN, but it didn't feel like a parody or anything.Ferdielance wrote:Spoiler : hmm :
[M] Endless Nights - Daybreak
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Re: [M] Endless Nights - Round [a number above ten]
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Re: [M] Endless Nights - Round [a number above ten]
It was lonely now.
I sat in the midst of what had once been such a shining, such a magnificent place. No... It was still magnificent. But it was lonely now, too. And dark.
What a life we had built! Every day an adventure, not knowing what would come next. We laughed, and cheered, and greeted, and bid farewell, and fought, and cried. Wasting so much time, on something that was unique and special and beautiful and not a waste at all. We spent our dreams as if they would never run out and all would come true.
I had walked along the various paths here so many times, even in the midst of this pitch darkness I could have strolled to any lot I wanted if I had so desired. I remained seated.
At the forefront of my mind were those great structures that had seemed to tower over all else. The ruins of a man named Ozymandias (not that one) at the end of a long hallway. A burned-down mansion, where the only item recovered had been a novel by S. S. Van Dine found in the pocket of one of the servants. An organ (biological, not musical) made purely of shimmering metal. Or part of one, at least.
Then there were the stranger, more unique ones. A fully functioning spaceship. A scrap of paper with nothing but a single digit written over and over again. A puzzling and exclusive club that was said to have changed itself to fit every guest who entered.
Of course there were also the older monuments, from a previous time. A statue of a man with a dragon for a head. The one that boasted itself flawless. The one I may have just dreamt.
All of them treasures. Not my treasures, but which I treasured all the same. Even this unending night had been comforting the first few hours.
I shivered as I thought of how some—most?—had fallen into disrepair. But I could still visit the memories, and they warmed my heart even on a night this cold.
I shook my head at myself. Partially in disappointment, partially to try to snap myself out of it. Enough with the histrionics. You may be "old," but you're much too young to be acting like this. It isn't over, it isn't done. It isn't abandoned. You're just choosing to stay here and pretend there's nobody else.
Maybe. But it's still changed. Perhaps there is someone, unseen under the cover of this night, building a new structure to rival those of the old giants. No matter how much I doubted this, I could not disprove it. But even if it is true, a single building does not a city make.
...Enough.
I reached out with my hand and ran my fingers over the letters engraved into the stone. I couldn't see them, but I could trace out their shape by touch. I had to reassure myself of the words one last time.
I stood up.
There was work to do.
And then it would be time to leave.
I sat in the midst of what had once been such a shining, such a magnificent place. No... It was still magnificent. But it was lonely now, too. And dark.
What a life we had built! Every day an adventure, not knowing what would come next. We laughed, and cheered, and greeted, and bid farewell, and fought, and cried. Wasting so much time, on something that was unique and special and beautiful and not a waste at all. We spent our dreams as if they would never run out and all would come true.
I had walked along the various paths here so many times, even in the midst of this pitch darkness I could have strolled to any lot I wanted if I had so desired. I remained seated.
At the forefront of my mind were those great structures that had seemed to tower over all else. The ruins of a man named Ozymandias (not that one) at the end of a long hallway. A burned-down mansion, where the only item recovered had been a novel by S. S. Van Dine found in the pocket of one of the servants. An organ (biological, not musical) made purely of shimmering metal. Or part of one, at least.
Then there were the stranger, more unique ones. A fully functioning spaceship. A scrap of paper with nothing but a single digit written over and over again. A puzzling and exclusive club that was said to have changed itself to fit every guest who entered.
Of course there were also the older monuments, from a previous time. A statue of a man with a dragon for a head. The one that boasted itself flawless. The one I may have just dreamt.
All of them treasures. Not my treasures, but which I treasured all the same. Even this unending night had been comforting the first few hours.
I shivered as I thought of how some—most?—had fallen into disrepair. But I could still visit the memories, and they warmed my heart even on a night this cold.
I shook my head at myself. Partially in disappointment, partially to try to snap myself out of it. Enough with the histrionics. You may be "old," but you're much too young to be acting like this. It isn't over, it isn't done. It isn't abandoned. You're just choosing to stay here and pretend there's nobody else.
Maybe. But it's still changed. Perhaps there is someone, unseen under the cover of this night, building a new structure to rival those of the old giants. No matter how much I doubted this, I could not disprove it. But even if it is true, a single building does not a city make.
...Enough.
I reached out with my hand and ran my fingers over the letters engraved into the stone. I couldn't see them, but I could trace out their shape by touch. I had to reassure myself of the words one last time.
Though the sun may set
The day shall break yet
The day shall break yet
I stood up.
There was work to do.
And then it would be time to leave.
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Re: [M] Endless Nights - Daybreak
Good… Your spirit is not BROKEN yet
You have done well in making it this far
No matter how BLACK the night,
Dawn will eventually come…
In the ordinary case, at least
But as I’m sure you’ve realized by now,
This is no NORMAL place
So now it is time to settle things
Can you solve the DILEMMA
And be there AT DAWN’S BREAK,
Or will you become trapped within the darkness of the abyss?
Come, the “End” of the Night approaches…
But first, two warnings:
One, I will show no mercy,
And two, you have already fallen for the first trap.
Now, if you still have COURAGE, come and play…
You have done well in making it this far
No matter how BLACK the night,
Dawn will eventually come…
In the ordinary case, at least
But as I’m sure you’ve realized by now,
This is no NORMAL place
So now it is time to settle things
Can you solve the DILEMMA
And be there AT DAWN’S BREAK,
Or will you become trapped within the darkness of the abyss?
Come, the “End” of the Night approaches…
But first, two warnings:
One, I will show no mercy,
And two, you have already fallen for the first trap.
Now, if you still have COURAGE, come and play…
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[D]isordered speech is not so much injury to the lips that give it forth, as to the disproportion and incoherence of things in themselves, so negligently expressed. ~ Ben Jonson