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Ace attorney: Athena Cykes Moodful Justice

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:objection:
Ace attorney: Athena Cykes Moodful Justice is a AU that SOJ never existed..
And here, Athena Cykes Puts the witnesses to justice!
Sprites of apollo and Lloyd Blackburn/Sam Erilo by lind.
and sprites of athena are Made by Rajin,SuperAj3, ShiroForever, Hesseldahl and SilverGlas.
Tell me if there is anything bad, It will be fixed..If.can I see it..
I've decided to cancel the development of this, And start on something fresh--er.
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Re: Ace attorney: Athena Cykes Moodful Justice

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I finished Part One, which I assume was all the parts you have. If I can ask...
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How does the witness getting the murder weapon wrong prove he was at the crime scene? Since he said that he was there in his testimony, why do we even need to prove that?
[D]isordered speech is not so much injury to the lips that give it forth, as to the disproportion and incoherence of things in themselves, so negligently expressed. ~ Ben Jonson
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Thank you for telling me that, I should fix that...I need to fix the whole "THE VICTIM IS THE FATHER OF CODY HACKINS."

It has been fixed..
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Please do not double post. You can just edit the original post instead.

I looked at the edit, but I'm still confused.
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What is the point of having Cody's cross-examination? It doesn't seem to give the court new information about the crime, characterize anybody, or raise tension. Did you just have this cross-examination because you needed cross-examinations?
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I notice this problem now..I'll just change the Witness..
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Let me know when you have the change made.

If you haven't yet, I highly recommend reading my tutorial here.
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Oh, also: please follow the case showcasing rules regarding putting "dots" and [T] tags in the topic title.
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The change has been..made
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Why is this case so similar to 1-1 now? All your contradictions come from 1-1, and you even take some of your dialogue directly from the case.
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...Cody was to useless as a character, all the others are useless except for the normal Frank Sawhit..And...I MAY have added a Few danganronpa Themes...
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Sure, but my question hasn't been answered. Why did you take dialogue and contradictions straight from 1-1?
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I Didn't know what to put...But, I'm going to try Making it...DIFFERENT...
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As-in, the series is going to be different from the canon series, or you're going to make the first case different?
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First case different..
Or second case different Dunno
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You have to make your first case different. Case rules say that you can't recreate Ace Attorney games, and right now, your first case is far too close to it. You're directly taking dialogue and contradictions from the first game without adding much new to it. That is too close to recreation.

Let me know if you need advice on doing it.
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