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[T] Turnabout Carjack ★ 

Message par Meph » Dim Août 16, 2009 8:56 pm

Turnabout Carjack
There's more to it than what you see...


Synopsis
An abandoned car, a theft and a woman too depressed to speak.

Seven years after Phoenix Wright lost is badge, Miles Edgeworth was still in shock from the events of Trials & Tribulations. After Prosecutor Godot's crime was discovered, it broke Miles into a confusion. Can prosecutors really become monsters? Does being a prosecutor make one a monster? The only way he could answer this question was by changing his point of view. Thanks to the help of some colleagues in the prosecutors office, Miles was given a defence attorney's badge.

Fiz Brown is believed to have stolen a fancy and very expensive new convertible that Rosie Webster recently bought. The car had apparently been driven around the town. It was found lying in the middle of the road about a kilometre away. The only "proof" of Fiz's crime is the fact that she is admitting to it.

As soon as Miles Edgeworth was made aware of this, he knew there was more to it than what everyone else saw. When he saw Fiz's eyes in the detention centre, he knew that there was more to this case. He knew that Fiz was not the true criminal. But can Miles claim victory when there is no other possible criminal?

Features
  • The story is loosely based off a storyline in Coronation Street and features the characters involved.
  • You can play as Miles Edgeworth at the defence's side of the courtroom.
  • The story is so emotional that it might even make you cry!
  • Use of the Ace Attorney Investigations: Miles Edgeworth soundtrack.

Parts
Part 1: Trial Former (Click here to play)
Fiz Brown is accused of stealing a car and is even admitting to it! Is she really telling the truth?

Part 2: Trial Middle (Click here to play)
Franziska von Karma won't go down that easy! Can the victim shed light on the situation?

Part 3: Trial Latter (Click here to play)
In a trial that's going nowhere fast, can Miles Edgeworth solve this case once and for all?

If you've already seen the Coronation Street episodes that this was loosely based on, please use spoiler tags when discussing spoilers.
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par henke37 » Dim Août 16, 2009 10:00 pm

Frame 135 and 325 lacks the word "is". Otherwise, you did really well. Pitty that the objection sound has that silly initial pause, but that's not you fault. Also, please remember to finish this one. You do have a habit of forgetting cases.
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Meph » Dim Août 16, 2009 10:07 pm

henke37 a écrit :Also, please remember to finish this one. You do have a habit of forgetting cases.

It's not that I forget them. When I make cases, I make details of the story up as I go along. However, this one's different. I've thought everything through.
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Darkdamacus » Dim Août 16, 2009 11:18 pm

Hahah, I do the same thing, work on one trial, get a new Idea, Forget the old one and make a new one :larry:

As for your case, Great work! Although, I did notice one really really small problem.. When you cross examine Ema for the first time and you press her third statement, Her last sentence uses the "Automatic" tone of blipblip'ing.. (I dunno what to call it, I go by Edgeworth's understandings XD)

Other than that, Great work!

P.S: You beat me to publishing a case with Edgeworth as the defense! :[
Apollo Justice: Turnabout Brotherhood Part 1 http://aceattorney.sparklin.org/jeu.php?id_proces=7746
Apollo Justice: Turnabout Brotherhood Part 2 http://aceattorney.sparklin.org/jeu.php?id_proces=7810
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Kenneth3k1 » Dim Août 16, 2009 11:28 pm

Well take your time I like a quality trial I haven't seen many new trials lately...

I do the same thing I think of a good idea and the resst of the plots flow into my head as I write it.

Nice job on the trial WOOPDY DO!!!
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Meph » Dim Août 16, 2009 11:37 pm

I'm glad you all like it. :)
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Court-Records » Lun Août 17, 2009 6:37 pm

OBJECTION!
When Miles makes his objection,
Gumshoe mentions a scary look.
This is the exact text:
Spoiler : :
After working with her for a year, I know what he's like.


You need to change the he's to she's.

OBJECTION!
Spoiler : :
Dear Fiz

You are the angle that brightens my dark nights and the beauty that fights of my ugly fellow inmates. I love you and I'd like to thank you for forgiving me. There's something I want to ask you:

Will you marry me?

If you say yes, I will give you the most beautiful ring I can buy.

Love from,
John Stape

It should say Angel instead, no?


OBJECTION!
In the second testimony
Spoiler : :
after the ring one
when you present, he says HOLD IT, even though the thing says OBJECTION!

OBJECTION!
When Franzy asks
Spoiler : :
Can you prove that your client actually forgave John Stape for his crimes?

Everyone talks in the defendants area. <.<

Other than those flaws,
I LOVE IT.
But please, fix those?

I hold you to a high standard because you are an Mod, who seems to be partly in charge of cases.
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Meph » Lun Août 17, 2009 8:24 pm

Thanks for noticing those mistakes. I've corrected them. :) And I'm glad you liked it.
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Court-Records » Lun Août 17, 2009 8:30 pm

No problem. ^^
Yes, and I hope to see more soon. :mrgreen:
(Of course, what I really need to do is stop playing cases and finish my own...XD)
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Darkdamacus » Lun Août 17, 2009 9:37 pm

(Of course, what I really need to do is stop playing cases and finish my own...XD)


I can relate completely. XD
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par FrozenPhoenix » Mar Août 18, 2009 3:20 am

An Ace Attorney case that ISN'T a murder? How absurd! But refreshing. :pearlhappy:

I only noticed two things wrong: Franny's Objection has a delay in it. You might want to use the one tetris posted.

Spoiler : :
And when she asks Edgeworth to prove that Fiz forgave John Stape for his crimes, the Life Bar flashes even though no points are taken off if you get it wrong.


I love the trial though. It was excellent.
Turnabout Office: Part 1 Part 2
The Perfect Turnabout: Part 1 Part 2 Part 3
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Meph » Mar Août 18, 2009 10:58 am

FrozenPhoenix a écrit :Franny's Objection has a delay in it. You might want to use the one tetris posted.

No. If the default one used in AAO is broken, then it needs to be fixed. ;)
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Meph » Sam Sep 26, 2009 5:05 pm

Part 2 is ready! I hope you all enjoy this short part, which is a very important of the story.

http://aceattorney.sparklin.org/jeu.php?id_proces=8287

I will start working on Part 3 after Unas has completed the AAO Trial Editor version 5.
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par Court-Records » Sam Sep 26, 2009 7:08 pm

No, To be Continued?
Rather short, and a little like TEH HELL?! I need moar!
XD
I felt like it was a tiny little clip compared to the avg. part of a case. <.<
However, it was very important, and did give them a new clue.
I hope to see part 3 soon.
Where oh where is this trial headed?
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Re: Trial Showcase: Turnabout Carjack 

Message par henke37 » Sam Sep 26, 2009 8:35 pm

A bit thin on the sound effects in my opinion.
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