[T] Secrets of a Turnabout ○
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
WHY DID YOU LIE TO US LIKE THAT MEPH!!! (Plus, the trial auto-loaded to the "final" part...)
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
I'm noticing a lot of missing periods after honorifics, I.e Mr Payne instead of Mr. Payne...
Oh, and periods are making your dialogue sound dry at times. I.e, "(I thought I was the one who was meant to be defending Nathan.)" sounds better with an ellipsis, and sounds better with an exclamation mark.
"D-Don't be rediculous!" You misspelled ridiculous? Don't be ridiculous!
Oh, and periods are making your dialogue sound dry at times. I.e, "(I thought I was the one who was meant to be defending Nathan.)" sounds better with an ellipsis, and
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat!? It's not the final part? D:
Oh well... I guess I'll just give some random thoughts.
That was quite interesting, Meph.
Oh well... I guess I'll just give some random thoughts.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
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I'm glad the plot was keeping you intruged. That puts my mind at rest. I keep getting worried each time I release a new chapter in case I've made it too mad or I've compressed so much into it.
This has been discussed before. I'm using British grammar. We don't put full stops after prefixes.BBblader© wrote:I'm noticing a lot of missing periods after honorifics, I.e Mr Payne instead of Mr. Payne...
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I'm glad the plot was keeping you intruged. That puts my mind at rest. I keep getting worried each time I release a new chapter in case I've made it too mad or I've compressed so much into it.
I thought I'd fixed all of them, but thanks for telling me.I noticed a few small errors with sprites appearing on the wrong background.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
I like Giovanni. But!
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
Thanks.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
I finally played Part 3 and I really liked it =)
The plot gets more interesting and deepens, and each background character gets his own protagonism, which is good
There were missing words, grammar mistakes, sprite errors, missing timers, but they didn't bother me much
The difficulty in overall is quite easy but I think that what makes this case a good case is the story
I'm looking forward to playing part 4 =)
The plot gets more interesting and deepens, and each background character gets his own protagonism, which is good
There were missing words, grammar mistakes, sprite errors, missing timers, but they didn't bother me much
The difficulty in overall is quite easy but I think that what makes this case a good case is the story
I'm looking forward to playing part 4 =)
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
Thank, Dan.
I'm not sure where all of the missing words and whatnot are. It's hard to notice them when I've been developing this so long; I skip past them when I playtest without realising. They should all get fixed when I ask for a QA review.
I'm not sure where all of the missing words and whatnot are. It's hard to notice them when I've been developing this so long; I skip past them when I playtest without realising. They should all get fixed when I ask for a QA review.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
You know you suck when you can't get past the very first testimony.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
Apparently, the first testimony isn't very hard, so I won't change it. However, I thought it would be a bit hard, so I'll give you a few clues.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
Are you sure that you didn't outsource this to someone else? Because there are some typos and even a floating sprite.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
As I say, I've checked for as many as I can, but I'm not able to notice them all. It would be helpful if people actually pointed out where they are.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
One off the top of my head: it's "Acquittal" not "Aquittal." Also I believe you spelled Wright "Wight" once or twice.
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
I suppose I'll go through this and check for the errors myself, since it's not so long. Check soon, Meph. Also, now that you're done Part 3 you can play my trial!!!! *COUGH*
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Re: Trial: Secrets of a Turnabout
It's alright, Chaos. You don't have to play it again. ^_^
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