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I want to say "He's not available for any battle afterwards" but I don't like how it sounds. I want to use another word

So, how should I rephrase it? I want it like this one "He's not available for future battles"
Yeah, I mean the appropriate word to replace the 'future' word

Fast help really needed and much appreciated. Thanks :mrgreen:
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You could say, "He won't be available for any more battles (after this)." Or, if you don't mind, "He's/ll be unavailable for the battles to come." Future works fine, though.
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I just want to replace the word 'future' in the sentence "He's not available for future battles"

with something that would fit more
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Well, if you're looking for a single word, then we have a problem. The next best runner up is 'any more'

"He's not available for any more battles.

"He's not available for more battles" may actually fit, but it depends on the context and speaking style of whoever is voicing the line.
If you are slightly more flexible, then "He isn't available for more battles" fits slightly with the word 'more'.
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"Further" could also work.
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'These kinds of assumptions are pretty flagrant on this board when it comes to suggestions'
What does flagrant mean? I looked it up on google and still couldn't understand :trilo:

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Sometimes Irritated with people handling their jealousy with satirical or a mean joke. Help yourself by being kind and mind your own business so maybe you'll find peace and success in your life,ok? Don't lower yourself
How to rephrase it better?
Also NO, it's not me who wrote it. I stole it from someone else's profile on facebook :side:
I don't like her choice of words and fail grammar, I think
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You could say : Sometimes I'm irritated with people and handling their jealousy with a satrical or mean joke. Help yourself by being kind and mind your own business and maybe you'll find peace and suceed in your life, ok? Don't lower yourself
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'Sometimes I'm irritated with people handling their jealousy with a satrical or mean jokes. Help yourself by being kind and mind your own business and maybe you'll find peace and suceed in your life. Don't lower yourself.'

This would be the correct way of saying the above. (No offense Shokka, I just noticed a couple of typos.)
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Wolf Speaker wrote:'Sometimes I'm irritated with people handling their jealousy with a satrical or mean jokes. Help yourself by being kind and mind your own business and maybe you'll find peace and suceed in your life. Don't lower yourself.'

This would be the correct way of saying the above. (No offense Shokka, I just noticed a couple of typos.)
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Eh, you both missed a 'i' from the 'satrical' (satirical). It's probably 'with a satirical or mean joke' with [satirical or mean] as adjectives describing [joke]. Either that or it's 'with satire or a mean joke', then [satire] stands on its own. [mean jokes] can also be used to replace [a mean joke], it just makes it pural, which isn't that significant.

There's a lot of 'and's in the second sentence, I would suggest replacing the second 'and' to a comma and a 'then'. (I think a semicolon would work too, but I'm not too fond of using them.) This would make it look like this: 'Help yourself by being kind and mind your own business, then maybe you'll find peace and succeed in your life, ok?'
Personally, I think 'ok' at the end sounds a bit weird though. not sure if there's a better solution that keeps the meaning of 'asking' someone. (Though it might be more like threaten? Not too sure if there's a better way to describe the tone.)


Oh, by the way, 'flagrant' means something along the lines of 'outrageous'. Basically, it's doing something that's obviously wrong.
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You could have: ' Not Accessible' in the middle the trick is let the character do the talking. show them through the character because only then can the reader find out who this person is.

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This will be his last, final battle.
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You could used this

' At the end of time fate will be decided for whom is for ... to decide at dawn the truth will be found. Law will prevail.'

" Yes I am sure it will but .... not here at the moment ..... is out."
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